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How To Get Ripped Fast For Free - Would You Read A Story Like This?I decided in July of this year to write a story. At first I was doing a spin off to Twilight by SM in the POV of a new character. But the character in question didnt like that and gave me nothing in regards to Twilight. I tried hard to get her to conform to my vision of her being a Cullen but she was having none of that and fought hammer and tongs for her own plot. She got it! And so here it is. The story: Clarisse 2000th birthday is approaching. She has known all her existence that she was different. What she didnt know was that she is much more different than she could ever have imagined. The first 1200 years of her life were spent with her brothers (not in the biological sense) Rohan and Tristan who have raised her since she was a baby. They know her history; what she REALLY is what she should become and how she even became to be but have chosen to keep this from her. Along come Nicoli and Verity. Nicoli and Verity are a father/daughter duo. They live as a family of five for almost 800 years until one day Verity after harbouring such an immense amount of hate for Clarisse leaves taking her father with her (because that is his daughter his blood) and breaking a family apart. Thus their departure sets off a chain of events that sets Clarisse wheels of fate in motion. A peace covenant made between Magics Elders and Darkworld Royals will be been broken. Blood will be spilled and Clarisse will be found. Now her brothers must fight to keep the Royals from her while trying to calm the animosity between them and the Elders. The Royals send out assassins the Elders seek retribution and a family of 3 must battle for the salvation of an entire race. The odds are stacked against them and allies are few. What will they do? Will they reveal to Clarisse who she was born to be? Or will they die in a bid to keep her free? Prologue: Faster than anyone can comprehend I darted across the room my eyes squarely fixed on my sister... my life... my everything; though she would never know that. Her new eye colour; a sparkling charcoal flame hue sat well against her lightly tanned skin the anger seeping from them growing more dangerous as each second passed. She was losing control. We were losing her. Outside flashes of bright blue and white danced across the rolling sea of black sky followed by the rumbling sound of surging thunder. The thunder made the house vibrate violently while the wind; which less than five minutes ago was nothing more than a gentle breeze now howled ferociously singing an eerie song of malevolence and bringing with it the first few drops of rain. Liss I whispered taking her face in my hands and lifting it up to mine. Fight this! For me for Tristan for you fight this! I pleaded. Pease! Move ... Rohan her tone was low the sound escaping through gritted teeth. No Resting my forehead on hers I forced every ounce of love warmth and comfort that I could muster from within me and into her. The emotions passed between us but had only the slightest effect on hers. This moment was the one moment we had tried desperately to keep her from experiencing. Yes she was the Ancient but no it did not have to be this way. Her eyes in all their charcoal flamed glory swirled with fury as she ripped her face from my hands. Bringing her hands up to her chest the speed she used in her movements were too fast for me to see. My body flew through the air sailing backwards where with a thunderous crash I smashed into the marbled fireplace. The lightning outside flashed brighter angrier and the thunder that rumbled now roared dangerously; just as the the wind wailed fiercely and the rain now fell with an unmatched power all of its own. My heart had I had one that beat would surely have been pounding furiously in my chest; dancing erratically with the frenzied shutters that banged loudly against the windows. The monster her monster which had been so eager to escape was now being liberated. Brutal violence emanated around us ripping through the layer of anger that had lingered far too long. Her body rose from the floor her face looked to the skies a pained scream escaped her lilps. A burning desperation ripped through my body; desperate to save her and foolish enough to die trying. With no caution for my own well-being for my own safety I sprung to my feet. AND THATS ALL I GOT AS FAR AS THAT GOES The story is close to being finished and Ive been posting little bits up just as they are; unedited and never read keen to work on anything that anyone suggests. Dont post anything if its to bag on the grammar and punctuation. Its unedited. Just let me know if the plot is believeable and whether or not it is something people would want to read. You can read my previous questions on my profile for a sample of what Im working on as there are snippet pieces randomly chosen from my novel there. All opinions/thoughts/suggestions/ Ops I actually need to correct myself. When I said the story was near completion I lied lol. What I really meant to say is this ... The first of at least 3 books is near completion and the prologue up there would come from the third book. My characters are not from SM world where her vampires survive off animals and such. They are similar however in that they are compassionate though they are very true to their nature in everyway. There are warlocks/a wizard/witches/vampires and humans all in here. This is purely being written for my own pleasure. I am not a writer and had my niece not introduced me to the Twilight books I would not be writing at all lol. - How To Get Ripped Fast For Free
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